Hello Everyone!
Here is my initial plot/storyline for my story, this is just
my first draft so it isn't set out correctly and is just a brief outline. Any
and all comments are welcome and encouraged, thanks.
[INT. STEVEN'S BEDROOM]
(Early morning. A series of emphasising shots arranged as a
montage show the following scene.)
Steven Smith, a 32 year old window cleaner, begins his day
like any other. He wakes up and changes into his work overalls, gathers a
bucket, squeegee and a ladder and throws them into the back of a van. a close
up of the side of the van shows the company name; Steve Smith, Squeegee Window
Cleaning Co.
[EXT. TERRACED STREET]
(L.S shows the van enter from a distance and pull up to a
house on a street. C.U of Steven's feet as he exits the van and pans up to
reveal him for the first time)
Steven exits the van, collects his equipment and sets up
ready to begin cleaning the lower windows on the house. As he is cleaning one
of the windows, it flips open and he falls into the building and lands in a
dark, dank room.
[INT. THE LABORATORY]
He climbs to his feet and begins to wander around the room
looking for an exit, as he does he finds he is surrounded by a strange array of
machinery covered in lights and screens. In the centre of the room is a large
glass case connected to a console by a series of wires and tubes. A single
light is shining down onto the case highlighting an object within. Steven approaches
the glass case to examine what is inside and discovers that within the case is
what appears to be an ordinary goldfish bowl.
As Steven gets closer to the case, he notices a strange aura
exuding from within the bowl. Intrigued, he presses up against the glass case,
and out of the corner of his eye he notices a large glowing button on the
console. At first he resists, but decides to push the button. Suddenly there is
a roar as the machine powers up, electricity flickers along the wires to the
case, and a blinding light causes Steven to look away.
(I've been struggling to come up with an ending for this
story and I have a couple of ideas so I would appreciate it if you could give
me your opinions on which one works best, or any thoughts on a new ending.)
Ending No. 1
As the light fades the glass case rises and Steven looks
once again at the goldfish bowl. A small ball of light begins to rise from the
bowl and floats over towards him, as it touches his skin a close up of his eyes
shows the light reflected in them. Suddenly the light begins to seep into
Steven's hands, a short animatic sequence shows the light infecting his body
through his veins and arteries, right up to his brain. The camera captures
Steven's facial expression in confusion as his body begins to dissipate. The camera
zooms out as Steven slowly vanishes and all that is left is a squeegee which
falls to the floor, the final shot is a close up of the squeegee laying in the
middle of the laboratory.
Ending No. 2
When the light fades Steven returns to look at the glass
case to find that he is in a completely different place, It appears to be a
void in which he has been transported to. As he looks around he can see stars
and planets and as he looks to his feet it seems that he is floating on
nothing. In the distance he can see a bright light, as he strains his eyes to
exam the distant light there is a huge explosion and behind him forms a black
hole. Steven begins running towards the light as everything around him is
sucked into the void, the closer he gets to the light the greater the black
hole becomes. Just as he reaches the light and throws himself through it, the
last of the space is consumed and he is thrown onto the floor of the laboratory
once more. Scared and confused he runs to the window he fell through and climbs
out, grabs his stuff and speeds off in his van.
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